Talk:Day 1 - Scene 1/@comment-82.230.16.83-20130519215546

Great text! I especially love the intro with the summer tuning its instruments. Well, I really liked the rest of it too! It's easy to get into Enar's mood and surrounding, and I'm quite curious about those upcoming changes in his life, that he seems to know are about to happen (although he doesn't know which).

A question on the anfylk sized train: are humans ever going out to anetacht or is it only for his kind?

Then to my minor typos:

In the first paragraph, it's not "it's way" but "its way" (correct in the previous sentence, but the "it's way" error is repeated at a later point). "Forest's" should be right though (I'd said "edge of the forest" but that's a question of preference).

"about a half of a mile", maybe enough with "about half a mile"?

"vast expanse" - beautiful expression but repeated twice quite close to each other.

"time table"/timetable?

I got it that anetacht is a place; it could be made more evident by using Anetacht (again - question of preferences!)

"and part of the experiEnce"

"but (what) with his mother being ill"

/cheers